The Muse
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Post by The Muse on Jul 9, 2009 3:26:52 GMT -5
•Title: Slayer •Challenge: #2 Villain’s POV •Fandom: Buffy the Vampire Slayer •Pairing/Characters: Spike ft. Drusilla and Buffy •Summary: Spike didn’t come to Sunnydale to kill the Slayer. •Rating: PG •Warnings: Language •Disclaimer: I wish I was Joss Whedon. (I don’t own the characters.) •Word Count: 100 •Author's Note: 100 words was more difficult than I thought. The original draft was over 300. “Spikey?” “Yes, my sweet?” “When the Slayer comes…do I get a nibble at her?” “You take all the nibbles you want out of her head. Just leave me the body.” "Of course." “It’s time we see what all the fuss is about.” *** “Giles, this isn’t the fourteenth century anymore. Could you attempt to dress a little more hip?” “Damn, Dru. You said you had ‘the perfect spot to spy on the Slayer.’” “Spikey! You don’t like it? I found it for us.” “I know, pet. Sorry.” What I would give to touch her, kiss her. Kiss the Slayer. Kiss Buffy. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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Secret Scoobie
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Post by Secret Scoobie on Jul 9, 2009 5:15:10 GMT -5
Haha an interesting twist! I'm sure there are some Spuffy fans who'd love this... Hehe Spike coming to KISS the slayer, and Dru seems fine with it too!
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meliafairy
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Post by meliafairy on Jul 9, 2009 5:38:09 GMT -5
In the author's notes I see you mentioned that this drabble actually used to be a longer piece. I hate to say that I can tell. Something is just missing. The drabble is a bit dis-jointed.
I feel like you have managed to make a villain not feel like a villain. If Spike, in his first view of Buffy, has these emotions, then the drabble is not really about a villain's POV.
Also, I don't think Dru ever called Spike "Spikey". That was what Harmony called him.
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Post by Skytteflickan88 on Jul 9, 2009 7:19:42 GMT -5
I have no idea where they are in the second part. Is "'Giles, this isn’t the fourteenth century anymore. Could you attempt to dress a little more hip?'” suppose to refer to a scene from the show?
It actually wouldn't surprise me if Spike always wanted to bed a slayer, but until Buffy, there was no opportunity. So I like the idea, and you some lines are well written, but a 100 words wasn't enough to tell the story correctly.
I'm fine with Dru saying "Spikey" tough. They must have tons of nick-names for each other we never heard on the show.
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zorthrip
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Post by zorthrip on Jul 10, 2009 4:02:59 GMT -5
I felt as if I read two half drabbles rather that one drabble. Also, I made the mistake of reading the piece before the notes, and didn't realized it was Dru with Spike until he called her by name. "Spikey" kept me thinking of Harmony calling him "Spikey-poo." I remember Dru using pet names such as "my dearest Spike" or "my pet." Just seemed out of character for me. I could see how it might have been better with all over 300 words.
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