The Muse
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Post by The Muse on Jul 9, 2009 3:30:23 GMT -5
Title: Heartburn Relief For Your Changing Body Challenge: #2 Villain's POV Fandom: Buffy the Vampire Slayer Characters: Mayor Wilkins, Deputy Mayor Allan Finch Summary: Mayor Wilkins detects an intruder at his office. Rating: PG Warnings: Implied mouse murder. Disclaimer: I don't own these characters. Word Count: 100 Author's Note: Sorry Mr. Mouse. “Allan. We have an intruder.” Mayor Wilkins said through gritted teeth, looking at his Deputy Mayor across his desk. “We do? Sir, I wasn’t alerted…” Allan replied heading for the door. Even though he was annoyed, Mayor Wilkins simply smiled. “Nuh uh uh. Allan, not that way.” The Mayor stated. Allan turned, wondering what was going on. Wilkins pointed across the room. A lone mouse was standing on its hind legs, sniffing the air. “Take care of that for me, we don’t need the germs. Oh and Allan? Save the eyeballs would you? They ease the heartburn during my transformation.” ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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Secret Scoobie
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Post by Secret Scoobie on Jul 9, 2009 5:16:00 GMT -5
Haha this one made me laugh! Great job!
And ewww about the mouse-eyes... but it certainly fits the mayor's character!
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meliafairy
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Post by meliafairy on Jul 9, 2009 5:41:30 GMT -5
You had me laughing with this drabble. Love the great characterization of the Mayor. This totally fits him! I could see this being a part of an episode. Great job!
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Post by Skytteflickan88 on Jul 9, 2009 6:42:32 GMT -5
Great characterization. I could hear the Mayor's voice when reading.
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Hellbound Hyperion
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Post by Hellbound Hyperion on Jul 9, 2009 7:42:30 GMT -5
Great characterization. I could hear the Mayor's voice when reading. Agreed. This one is strong in character. Love it.
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zorthrip
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Post by zorthrip on Jul 10, 2009 4:05:33 GMT -5
I enjoyed this one a lot. It was very in character, and fit him well. It was very fun and true to the mayor's personality.
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Post by Wyndam on Jul 13, 2009 23:15:31 GMT -5
Thank you for the kind comments everyone! This one was a ton of fun to write.
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Post by Emmie on Jul 13, 2009 23:26:38 GMT -5
I fail at giving comments on time apparently, but I wanted to say that you really captured the Mayor here. I loved the image of the mouse as an intruder. Your Mayor-voice was perfect and you really captured the mixture of gruesome and wholesomeness that is Richard Wilkins. Great job! A very enjoyable read that made me laugh even as I cringed a bit.
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