Danner's Poetry

[Danner]

I have a lot of old poetry that I may post later (they're mostly very sappy, heh), but here's something new.

Concrit is nice, but be gentle. ^^;;

From That High

The scars on my hands tell a story
I look at them, memories, I tore
holes in my skin and holes in my brain
Bore marks on my hips and lips that were stained
Fooled you so sweetly, those lies that I tell
We think we’re in Heaven but maybe it’s Hell

Confidence seeped into me, that girl
Who was slimmer and meaner in a body unfurled
But inside it’s rotted, painful and numb
I wish I could change it; it’s already done

One day I’ll breathe; one day I’ll sigh
I will be pulled down, down from that high

But hold me for now, before it’s too late
This lucidity is fleeting, about to escape
This house, not a home, where stories are kept
Where I am so very alone and bereft
Your chilled arms around me more solid
Than phantoms whose names have never been called

I am better now, I think, in this ghostly embrace
Mostly free of those impulses who have no face
I have grown some spine and learned some lessons
Now regretting my earlier, grotesque transgressions

Finally I can breathe; finally I can sigh
I’ve been pulled down, down from that high

[Secret Scoobie]

That's really lovely Danner.

Sounds like something I feel I can relate to, or maybe I'm just seeing my own interpretation of your words - but either way it touched me.

I particularly love these lines

But hold me for now, before it’s too late
This lucidity is fleeting, about to escape

[Danner]

Oct 21, 2010 0:34:17 GMT -5 Secret Scoobie said:

That's really lovely Danner.

Sounds like something I feel I can relate to, or maybe I'm just seeing my own interpretation of your words - but either way it touched me.

I particularly love these lines

But hold me for now, before it’s too late
This lucidity is fleeting, about to escape

Thanks so much!
Either way, I'm really glad you were able to draw something from it.
I tried to make it vague enough that it could mean different things depending on the reader, so yeah~

[VampSlayer]

That was great, Danner. My favorite part was:

'But inside it’s rotted, painful and numb
I wish I could change it; it’s already done'

Very deep. More, more, more!

[Secret Scoobie]

I think some of the best poetry is subjective - because it means it can go deeper than an overt description of one person's situation...

You achieved this

There are always at least TWO poems present - the one the writer wrote, and the one the reader reads.

<3 it.