POEM_ Talking, Towers, Memories, Crazy, Mixing

[buffysmglover]

Once in a while I will write poem that is like a bottle being popped open. All of my feelings come out in confusing lines, and these include multiple topics. I believe this is my third one.

No way to focus.
Can't take a breath.
I'm drinking water.
Thank God it may
Shut me up.

I was talking too much.
Too fast too?

Some towers fall.
Some memories die.
Not memories of her.
Not memories of you.
But keeping me
Distracted in my mind,
My thoughts,
Such penetration.
My eyes,
My heart.
Get out, get out.
But stay.
Definitely stay.
I need
Want you to stay.

Where?
I say things
No sense be making.
You're not here,
So where could you go?
I'm just crazy.
You make me crazy.
It feels like
Running water.
Turn the faucet.

And then it stops.
It feels like
Donuts
And starvation.
The two don't mix
So it's good and bad.
Do we mix?
I know we don't.
Do I? Do we?
But you make me crazy.

[lecter]

That was a very god poem. There were one or two points where you lost the flow a little, but other than that that's one of the better amateur poems I've read.

[buffysmglover]

lecter said:

That was a very god poem. There were one or two points where you lost the flow a little, but other than that that's one of the better amateur poems I've read.

Thanks a bunch! This is one of mine that I expect few comments to because of the craziness. I'm glad someone was able to comprehend it so much!

[Rachster]

wow that was really good how long you been doing poetry for/

[buffysmglover]

buffyfanforever said:

wow that was really good how long you been doing poetry for/

I'm not sure. I think 6th grade. But my first poems weren't personal.