Challenge #2 - Entry #1 - Quite a Ride

[The Muse]

Title: Quite A Ride
Challenge: #2 Villain's POV
Fandom: Buffy
Pairing/Characters: Faith and Buffy
Summary: Get inside Faith's head as she makes he escape in Graduation Day Part 1.
Rating: PG
Warnings: Little language, and violence
Disclaimer: I own neither Faith or Buffy! They belong to the all-powerful Joss!
Author's Note: I do not state Faith or Buffy's names in this drabble, but I'm sure you can tell who is who!


Somewhere deep down, I knew it would end like this. Hell, I think I may have even wanted it to.

"You did it..."

I gathered up my remaining strength, and gave that bitch one final blow to her pretty face.

"You killed me."

I made my way onto the edge of the building. I was not going to let her take me.

My eyes sunk down, finding my escape; Then they met her's.

"Still won't help your boy though..."

Her eyes grew wide, realizing my plan.

"Shoulda been there, B... Quite a ride."

With one last glare, I was gone.

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Please feel free to leave feedback for the author!

[meliafairy]

I really love this scene of this episode and there is so much potential to explore the thoughts that are happening in Faith's head at the time.

My issue with this drabble is that the main reason you managed to capture Faith's "voice" so well is that about a quarter of this drabble is actually direct quotes taken from the scene. I feel that you have lost originality by copying so much right out of the show.

In 100 words, if so many words aren't your own words, then in essence you have kind of just copied rather than exploring your own creativity.

[Skytteflickan88]

I think that you capture the moment very well, I could feel that it was Faith, thinking this. But as meliafairy said, more of your own words would have been better.

I would love to see what you could do if you fleshed out the fic and re-posted it in the fanfiction section.

[fayth]

Could have been a bit more in depth, take away the direct quotes you know. Faith has alot going on inside her that could have replaced those quotes. But still, I am so glad someone wrote on this scene! Best line -
I was not going to let her take me.

[Secret Scoobie]

I enjoyed this but at the same time I agree with the comments that too much was not your own words.

With a 100 word drabble it's half the challenge picking 100 meaningful words to express a scene or a character, and when so many were already written for you it takes away some of that challenge! What you did write was really good! You've gotten into Faith's heads and we get a taste - but also as it's been said before, if you'd used less canon-quotes you could've put a bit more of your own insight into Faith's mind in there instead.

[zorthrip]

I agree with the majority on this one.

Liked it, but too many borrowed words. I understand that the quotes are used to show exactly when these thoughts are taking place, with something this short it may have been too much.