Challenge #2 - Entry #11 - Crawling

[The Muse]

Title: Crawling
Challenge: #2 Villain's POV
Fandom: Buffy!
Pairing/Characters: Glittering Glorificus
Summary: Insight into a hell-god's thoughts.
Rating: G - General
Warnings: Nothing that could offend etc.
Disclaimer: These characters do not belong to me. I'm just borrowing from smart people.
Word Count: 100
Author's Note: Thanks to Rob the Frog, whose BBQ gave me the energy to sit down and blast this out!

Crawling

Crawling below. Human moral meat-sacks. Subjugate the sublime and worship the mundane. Crawl around the ant hive. Buildings like needles polluting the space.
Needles in my FRICKIN’ skull!
Needle in a haystack.
The KEY! NEED MY KEY!
Slayer. Tiny GNAT stealing above her station without proper propriety. No decency.
Gnat crawling inside my head gnawing and grinding, it’s not HERS!

Need to get back home. Home home vexation vengeance victorious vindication - VORTEX!
Make a vortex, need my key, then they’ll see, let it bleed dry, make them CRAWL!
Crawling crawling on my knees – WAIT!

“BRING ME ANOTHER!”
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That’s much better.

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Please feel free to leave feedback for the author!

[meliafairy]

The dis-jointed structure of this drabble captures Glory so perfectly. She is so dark and crazy but at the same time so confused.

Very well-written and creative! Love the use of alliteration!

[Secret Scoobie]

Excellent! I can really hear Glory thinking this! Very well captued her voice and the chaos of it is beautiful.

[Skytteflickan88]

It's crazy, but structured crazy that we fans can make sense of since we know what she wanted on the show.

Very well written.

[zorthrip]

I think you got Glory's voice perfectly. It was a lot of fun to read.

I got a little side tracked by the "v" alliteration because I kept thinking of the monologue at the beginning of V for Vendetta, but that's my own issue and not one of the pieces'.

Bravo!

[Emmie]

I love your use of alliteration here and thankfully I didn't go all V for Vendetta when I was reading it. You had me completely hooked into Glory's POV and it was a crazy fun ride. Great job! This was one of my favorites with it's frenetic build-up that abruptly dropped into a mellow sense of restored sanity.